Mary Kole is now providing consulting and editorial services for writers. Check her out! http://marykole.com/.
I've been impressed with her picture book and MG webinars through Writer's Digest as well as her blog at http://kidlit.com/.
If you are thinking about retaining her, you could take her webinar which includes a critique. Then, you'd get a sense of her editorial style AND learn about craft.
So I decided to jump on the Twitter bandwagon because I wanted to see what the fuss is about. After one intro session, I learned it is easy to get immersed in twittertopia for too long -- so many people, so much sharing! -- but there is a ton of helpful information there. For instance, check out this post by agent Mary Kole at www.kidlit.com: Two signs of overwriting and why it's a problem: http://ow.ly/6buRq#writing#kidlit.
What do you think? Do you need to simplify your writing?
Carrie Pearson is a children's book author, writer-cheerleader, and mentorship matchmaker.